Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph depicts information on the numbers off members for distinct activities at solo social center in Melbourne, Australia for two decades from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is noticeable that the numbers of participants in film club was the highest whereas the Amateur dramatics was at its lowest in 2020.
In 2000, the number of contestants in farm club stood at 65 and showed a slight decrease in five years although it showed minimal increase and reached at approximately 66. Furthermore the number of participants in martial arts was at 38 and followed a zig zag trends in next two decades and remain almost same until 2020. Moreover, the number of delegates in amateur dramatics stood at almost 26 and remain until 2005 and after that showed a dramatic fall until 2020 and round off below 10. In contrast the number of members in table tennis was at above 10 and depicts a slight increase in next five years and after that illustrates a dramatic climbed and reached above 50 last but not the least the number of participants in musical performances stood at 0 in 2005 and represent dramatic increase until 2020 and reached at above 10.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the highest and lowest points and made relevant comparisons. However, the report lacks a clear structure; it is presented as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs for the overview and body details. While the main features are reported, the analysis of the data is somewhat mechanical, listing figures sequentially rather than grouping them logically to highlight significant trends or relationships between the activities. To improve, ensure you clearly separate your overview from the detailed data analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response suffers from a lack of paragraphing, which is essential for a clear IELTS Task 1 report. The flow of information is somewhat repetitive, relying on basic connectors like 'furthermore' and 'moreover' to link sentences. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the lack of paragraph breaks makes the text feel dense and difficult to navigate. To reach a higher band, you must use paragraphing to separate the introduction/overview from the body paragraphs and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'dramatic fall' and 'slight increase'. However, there are several instances of inaccurate word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'contestants in farm club' (likely referring to 'film club') and 'zig zag trends'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'delegates' to describe club members. Spelling errors like 'climbed' instead of 'climb' also occur. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting and ensure that your word choices are appropriate for the context of a social centre.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('remain almost same'), missing articles ('in film club'), and awkward sentence construction ('last but not the least the number of participants...'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences that lack proper commas or conjunctions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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