Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph illustrates the proportion of data regarding different activities held in social center at Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
It is clear from the graph that in the year 2000 film club was consider as a popular activity as it had around 63 participants. On the other hand Musical performance did not have a single participant. There were 15 and 25 number of participants in activity of table tennis and Amateur dramatics , martial art had 38 number of participant. From the year 2005 to 2010 number of participants of film club were slightly fell down to 60 meanwhile, musical performances number of participants increased smoothly to 10. Table tennis and Amateur dramatics fluctuated in 2005 but become equal to 20 number of participants in 2010, martial art also increased its number of participants from 31 to 39 in 5 years of span.
Number of participants shot up sharply from 20 to 55 in the span of 2015 to 2020. On the other side participants number dropped suddenly for amateur dramatics till the year 2020. Film club had not shown much variation in terms of participants like musical performances and martial art where it increased to 20 and 38 number of participants respectively.
To conclude, film club considered as the popular among the people in compare to all, also there had been rise in playing table tennis.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, including the starting points and the trends over the period. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the data for 2005 to 2010 is confusing, and the summary of the final period lacks clarity regarding the specific activities. While you have identified the main trends, the reporting of figures is occasionally imprecise or difficult to follow. To improve, ensure that you group data logically—perhaps by activity or by trend—rather than listing figures chronologically, which can lead to a disjointed narrative. Ensure all comparisons are clearly linked to the specific years mentioned in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'On the other side' is used incorrectly to introduce a contrast that does not logically follow the previous sentence. Furthermore, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which activity is being discussed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'conversely', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic that is developed logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but it is often repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'number of participants' are used repeatedly, which makes the writing feel monotonous. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'increased smoothly' or 'in 5 years of span'. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary by using synonyms and more sophisticated reporting verbs. You should also focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'witnessed a gradual rise' or 'experienced a sharp decline', rather than relying on basic verbs like 'increased' or 'dropped'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'at social center'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'film club was consider as'), and subject-verb agreement errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses. Increasing the variety of complex structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases, would also help demonstrate better grammatical control.
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