Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph illustrates about a number of participants in various activities like film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics,table tennis, and musical performances at a social centre in Melbroune from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the graph shows maximum number of participants in film club and a there is fluctuation in the number of martial arts participants. besides these, the musical performances showed a minimum number of participating individuals.
The graph shows a maximum number of participants about 65 in film club in 2000 which decline slightly in 2005 and and 2010 before going to maximum in 2020. The martial arts shows 35 participants in 2000 which decreased to 30 in 2005 and 2015 and then goes to upto 34 participants. Amateur dramatics and table tennis gives peaks at almost 29 and 19 respectively in 2005 after that the table tennis shows a conitous rise in its number of participants fromm 2010 to 2020 with a maximum of almost 55 participants and amateur dramatics declined to 5 participants in 2020. Musical performances has no participants till 2005 after that its shows a rise and goes to about 18 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the late emergence of musical performances. However, the overview is slightly cluttered; it would be more effective to group the activities by their overall trends (e.g., those that increased versus those that declined) rather than listing them. While you have included data points, some of the descriptions of the trends are a bit repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview highlights the most significant differences between the activities more clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall,' 'besides these,' and 'after that,' but the flow is occasionally mechanical. The transition between sentences could be smoother; for instance, the jump between describing the film club and martial arts feels abrupt. Paragraphing is present, but the body paragraphs could be better balanced to improve the overall progression of ideas. Ensure that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect your points more naturally rather than relying on simple temporal markers.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation,' 'decline,' and 'continuous rise.' However, there are several spelling errors ('Melbroune,' 'conitous,' 'fromm') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'illustrates about a number of participants.' The word choice is generally functional but lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, which can distract the reader from your analysis.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The martial arts shows,' 'its shows a rise') and incorrect preposition usage ('goes to upto'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without unnecessary repetition of conjunctions.
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