Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph illustrates the numbers of learners for five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club remains at the top in terms of participants with some slight fluctuations over the period. In contrast, despite having the third highest learners in amateur dramatics, from 2005 it has seen a significant drop in number and had the least amount participants compared to other activities.
In terms of film club, with some slight fluctuations it always maintained a highest steady number of students which was around 65 in this whole period. Similar behavior seen for martial arts as it remained the second most dominant in number ( approximately 36 ) until table tennis overtook it in 2015.
Between 2000 and 2010, table tennis participants around 20 which eventually experienced a rapid rise in number and became the second highest in number in 2020. However, Amateur performances saw significant decline in number from 2005 to 2020 where it became lowest ( 8 ) compared to others. Furthermore, in terms of musical performances, despite having 0 participants at the initial period, it surpassed the amateur dramatics by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the most popular activity (Film club) and the significant decline in amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and highlights the main trends effectively. However, the report could be improved by providing more precise data points; for instance, stating 'around 65' is acceptable, but ensuring all figures are clearly linked to the specific years would strengthen the analysis. You have successfully selected and reported the main features as required by the task instructions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, and you use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' 'However,' and 'Furthermore' to link your points. While the structure is sound, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Additionally, the referencing could be more precise; for example, in the second paragraph, 'Similar behavior seen for martial arts' lacks a clear subject, which slightly disrupts the flow. Overall, the information is well-arranged and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'slight fluctuations,' 'significant drop,' and 'rapid rise' are appropriate for describing trends. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'highest steady number of students' (which is slightly awkward) and 'the least amount participants' (should be 'the fewest number of participants'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and ensure grammatical agreement when using quantifiers like 'amount' versus 'number'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'between 2000 to 2020' (should be 'between 2000 and 2020') and missing articles, for example, 'it always maintained a highest steady number' (should be 'the highest'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly fragmented, such as 'table tennis participants around 20,' which lacks a verb. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage will help improve accuracy.
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