Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of participants for various activities at social area in Melbourne and Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, all five acitivities increased or decreased over the years. Martial arts fluctuated between 2000 and 2020, while Amateur dramatics started from the third highest point and faced rapid down fall over the years. The major change was seen in Film club and Table tennis which grows significantly between 2000 and 2020 era. Musical performance increased a little bit.
In 2000, Amateur dramatics started from 18 ratio and grows a little in the next year as the years passed it decreased rapidly in 2020 at 3 ratio.
Martial arts activity fluctuates over the years started from 38 and in 2020 it remains constant at 39 ratio. In 2005, Musical perfomance activity occurred that increased enthusiastically and constant at 20 ration in 2020.
In contrast, the major perfomance has been seen in Table tennis and Film club. The activity of film club started from very highest point in all over the actitivities from 64 ratio and remains at 69 ratio in 2020. On the other hand, Tennis table started from 18 ratio in starting year and this activity increased rapidly and straight goes upward to 52 ratio in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview and identifies the main trends, such as the growth in the Film club and Table tennis, and the decline in Amateur dramatics. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For example, you state that Amateur dramatics started at '18 ratio' and grew, but the graph shows a different starting point. Furthermore, the use of the word 'ratio' is inappropriate for this data set, which represents participant numbers. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the figures from the graph and use appropriate terminology like 'participants' or 'number of people' rather than 'ratio'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. Phrases like 'in the next year' and 'as the years passed' are used to link ideas, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. The referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be more sophisticated to better guide the reader through the data analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. You rely heavily on basic verbs like 'increased' and 'decreased' and use the term 'ratio' incorrectly throughout the response. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'acitivities', 'perfomance', and 'actitivities'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', or 'remained stable', and ensure that you use terms that accurately reflect the data being presented.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'Film club and Table tennis which grows' (subject-verb agreement) and 'straight goes upward' (awkward phrasing). Additionally, there are issues with tense consistency, such as 'Musical performance activity occurred that increased'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past trends. Proofreading for minor errors in articles and prepositions would also help improve the overall accuracy.
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