Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The line graph illustrates the data on the numbers of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, film club dominated throughout the years, whereas amateur dramatics culminated with the lowest number of participants.

In 2000, 63 individuals joined the film club and the figure stayed nearly stable at 60 until 2010 before stepping up to 64 in 2015 and culminating at 65 in 2020. 37 residents participated in martial arts in 2000 but this number dropped to 31 in 2005 before rising to 39 in 2010, declining to 35 in 2015 and expanding to 38 in 2020.

Amateur dramatics started at 27 in 2000, picked up to 29 in 2005, before declining continuously to 20 in 2010, 14 in 2015 and 8 in 2020. Table tennis accounted for 18 people in 2000 and 20 in both 2005 and 2010, before rocketing to 38 in 2015 and 53 in 2020.

There were zero participants for musical performances in both 2000 and 2005 but this figure increased to 12 in 2010, 15 in 2015 and finally 18 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories (film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances) and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the dominance of the film club and the decline of amateur dramatics. The data is accurately reported, and the key features are highlighted effectively. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview is even more analytical by grouping trends more explicitly (e.g., contrasting the rising popularity of table tennis with the decline of amateur dramatics) rather than listing each category sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to specific trends. The progression of ideas is smooth, and you use a variety of cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'before', and 'in both'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories of activities. The flow is natural, and the information is easy to follow. To improve, you could use more sophisticated linking phrases to connect the body paragraphs, which would further enhance the logical flow between the different groups of data.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for describing trends, such as 'dominated', 'culminated', 'stayed nearly stable', 'picked up', and 'rocketing'. These choices are precise and help convey the movement of the data effectively. There is a good level of flexibility in your word choice. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'number' or 'figure' (e.g., 'participation levels', 'attendance figures', 'the count') to avoid repetition, and ensure that collocations are consistently natural throughout the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

Your grammar is generally accurate, and you use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. The use of temporal clauses (e.g., 'before declining continuously to...') is well-handled and adds complexity to your writing. Most sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation is solid. There are no significant errors that impede communication. To push into the higher bands, you could experiment with more advanced structures, such as passive voice constructions or participle clauses, to vary the sentence rhythm even further.

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