Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given graph show us the details of the numbers of participants for the different kind of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period of time from 2000 to 2020

First we will se the number of participants in 2000 are participant in different kind of activities the ratio of table tennis is between 10 to 20 ands the ratio of amateur dramatics is between 20 to 30 and the ratio of martial arts is between 30 to 40 and the highest ratio of activity in which number of participants is in great amount is film club its between 60 to 70.

If we talk about the number of participants in 2020 is different now. If we look at the graph the ratio of table tennis is increased like now the ratio of participants in table tennis is between 50 to 60. In 2000 the musical performance is not in such activities, now in 2020 the musical play an imp key role the ratio is between 10 to 20

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to report on the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or a summary of the main trends. The description is fragmented and lacks a professional tone. While some data points are mentioned, the analysis is superficial and relies on repetitive, inaccurate phrasing such as 'the ratio of'. Crucially, the response fails to mention several activities shown in the graph, and the comparison between 2000 and 2020 is incomplete and lacks precision. The writing style is overly informal and does not meet the requirements for an academic report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into short, disjointed paragraphs. There is a lack of logical progression, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'If we talk about', 'If we look at'). The transition between ideas is mechanical, and the lack of clear signposting makes the information difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a disjointed reading experience. The overall structure is weak and does not facilitate a clear summary of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student consistently uses the word 'ratio' incorrectly to describe absolute numbers of participants. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. Phrases like 'in great amount' and 'not in such activities' are imprecise and unnatural. The student struggles to use academic vocabulary appropriate for describing trends, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. The range is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The given graph show us'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence construction. Punctuation is largely absent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is little evidence of complex sentence structures, and where attempted, they are often grammatically flawed. The errors are frequent and noticeable throughout the text, which significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing.

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