Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The linear representation depicts the information about the number of participant for many activities at one social centre in different cities of Australia for the period 2000 and 2020.

Broadly, it can be seen that the fine club was at highest whereas table tennis was at the lowest.

By scrutinizing, marital arts showed a declination from 2000 till 2005, afterwards there was an inclination till 2010 and then remain constant till 2020. Amateur dramatics showed an inclination from 2000 till 2005, after that there was a declination till 2020.

Moving towards the rest of the data table tennis showed increament till 2010 to 20 and showed inclination to 50 till 2020. Musical performance was started from 2005 and it goes upward to 20 till 2020. Mainly, the film club was at the highest point all over the graph it was started from 65 in 2000 and goes upward to 70 in 2020, 5 percent of increament is seen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends for the various activities. However, the overview is somewhat weak, and there are inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student mentions 'different cities of Australia,' whereas the prompt specifies one social centre in Melbourne. Additionally, the description of the data for table tennis is confusing and lacks clarity regarding the timeline and figures. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the data points and the inclusion of inaccurate information regarding the scope of the study prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally mechanical, such as 'Moving towards the rest of the data' and 'By scrutinizing.' The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the description of different activities lacks a logical flow. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to be understood, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive structure of the sentences limit the effectiveness of the cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices or incorrect terminology, such as 'fine club' (likely referring to 'film club'), 'declination' instead of 'decline,' and 'increament' (spelling error). The student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the inaccuracies in word formation and collocation are noticeable. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'it was started from 65' (passive voice misuse), 'it goes upward' (tense inconsistency), and '5 percent of increament is seen' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often clunky. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over complex structures. More attention to subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tenses is required.

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