Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustration depicts the proportion of participants from various activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club which was highest number of participants while the musical performances was the lowest participants throughout the period.
In the film club it begins with 70 in the first year. Between the year 2000 to 2010 it steadily decreased and reached 60,afterwards it begin to rise and reached below 70 in the final year. In the martial arts it starts about 40 number then begin to fluctuated constantly hole time and reached between 40 to 30 number.
Between 2000 to 2005 it had below 30 participants and showed tiny incline, after 2005 it begin to fell dramatically and reached below 10 in 2020.In table tennis it had around 20 participants in the first year then slow increment and and became same before jumped insane. between 2000 to 2005 it had null participants then starts to rise and reached above 10 in2010 afterwards it surge steadily and reached below 20 in the year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the highest and lowest participants, the description of trends is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state the film club 'reached below 70' in the final year, which is vague, and the description of the martial arts and table tennis trends is difficult to follow due to unclear data reporting. The overview is present but lacks clarity. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the different activities and use precise data points to support your descriptions rather than generalising with terms like 'insane' or 'null'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical or misused, such as 'afterwards it begin to rise' or 'then slow increment and and became same'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which activity is being discussed in the latter paragraphs. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'starts', 'reached', and 'rise'. There are also instances of inappropriate word choice, such as 'jumped insane' and 'null participants', which do not fit the formal tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. Spelling errors, such as 'fluctuated' (used incorrectly as a verb form) and 'increment', also detract from the quality. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuation', 'decline', 'surge', and 'plateau'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the film club which was highest number', 'it begin to fell'), tense consistency (mixing past and present), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles before nouns.
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