Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph depicts the information about the numbers of participants for different countries take part in various activities during the time of 2001 to 2020.
overall, it can clearly seen that, numeronues particiapants take part in amateur dramatics as campare to other activities
To begin with, in 2000 number of participants take part in flim club it was 60%, which is highest percentage as campare to others in 2000. After five years, people were like to do martial arts, amateur dramatics activities
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is severely underdeveloped. While the introduction attempts to paraphrase the prompt, it contains factual errors (e.g., mentioning 'different countries' when the graph refers to a single social centre). The overview is vague and lacks a clear summary of the main trends. The body paragraph is fragmented, lacks specific data points from the graph, and fails to provide the necessary comparisons required for an Academic Task 1 response. The response is far too brief to adequately address the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and lack progression. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt. The lack of development makes it difficult to follow the writer's intent. To improve, the student should focus on using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to connect ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus supported by data.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'numeronues' for 'numerous', 'particiapants' for 'participants', and 'flim' for 'film'. The word choice is often inaccurate or awkward, such as 'people were like to do', which is informal and grammatically incorrect. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the ability to describe trends or data accurately. The student needs to learn specific terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'reached a peak'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'it can clearly seen that' (missing 'be'), 'as campare to' (incorrect prepositional phrase), and 'in 2000 number of participants take part' (missing articles and incorrect tense). The sentence structures are simple and often incomplete. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, the student must focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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