Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, film club participants are high from the beginning to till end, whereas Martial performances are least but at the end there was a slight increase. Amateur Dramatics was the only one had the fall. Moreover, Martial art was fluctuated and Table tennis had less participants in the beginning however, there was a drastic rise.
Film club participants were approximately 65 and martial art participants are around 35 in 2000, there was a slight fluctuation and in 2020 it remains same with the participants.
On the other hand, In 2000 Amateur dramatics people are approximately 25 and it declined gradually in 2020 with around 5 participants. By contrast to this, Table Tennis participants were around 15 and in 2000, there was a dramatic rise and it reached 50 participants in 2020.
However, Musical performance w
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, but it is incomplete as it cuts off mid-sentence at the end. While you successfully identify the trends for most categories, the analysis of the 'Musical performance' is missing, which prevents a full overview. The overview provided in the second paragraph is helpful, but the data reporting is sometimes imprecise (e.g., 'remains same' when there is a slight fluctuation). To improve, ensure you complete all descriptions and provide a more accurate summary of the data points, ensuring that the 'main features' are clearly highlighted without needing to list every single year.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'On the other hand', and 'By contrast to this' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and the abrupt ending of the text. The progression of ideas is generally logical, moving from an overview to specific category comparisons, but the mechanical nature of some transitions and the incomplete final sentence limit the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'drastic rise', and 'declined gradually'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Martial performances are least' (should be 'lowest') and 'from the beginning to till end' (redundant). There are also minor errors in word form, such as 'Martial art was fluctuated' (should be 'fluctuated'). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used in grammatically correct contexts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'Amateur Dramatics was the only one had the fall' (missing 'that'), 'martial art participants are around 35' (tense inconsistency), and 'it remains same' (missing article). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a lack of control over complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will significantly improve your score.
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