Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Here the given line graph illustrates the information the about amount of participants from various activities at particular social center in Melbourne, Australia through out the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Fill club was highest overtime while amateur dramatics declined significantly. The table tennis remained stable for initial years but skyrocketed at the end of the period.
To commence with, Film club stood up at around 65 in 2000 before declining slightly to 60 in 2010. It then recovered again to 65 at the end. Similarly martial arts stood at 35 in 2000 and decline to approximately 30 in 2000 before recovering again to 40 in 2010. it then fell the slight dip of 35 in 3015 and remained stable until 2020.
Moreover, amateur dramatics decreased gradually, starting from around 15 in 2000 and ended up at 5 in 2020. Furthermor, table tennis stood at 15 in 2000 and remained nearly same until 2010 which after skyrocketed to 55 in 2020. Lastly, musical performances was 0 in 2005 and raise gradually to 25 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview of the main trends, such as the Film club being the most popular and the decline of amateur dramatics. It selects and reports key features effectively. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as the mention of '3015' (likely a typo for 2015) and some confusion in the description of martial arts trends. While the main features are highlighted, the analysis could be more precise in comparing the activities to one another rather than just listing them chronologically. Overall, it covers all parts of the task sufficiently.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'Similarly' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as the unclear connection between sentences in the second body paragraph. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to connect the data points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing trends, such as 'skyrocketed', 'declined significantly', and 'remained stable'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'amount of participants' (should be 'number of participants') and 'Furthermor'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey the intended meaning, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band score. The range is sufficient for the task but does not demonstrate a high level of flexibility or control over less common lexical items.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('musical performances was 0') and tense inconsistencies ('decline to approximately 30'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are errors in sentence construction that occasionally distract the reader. While the meaning is rarely impeded, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. More attention to proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve the quality of the writing.
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