Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information of number participants between 2000 to 2020 for five different activities film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at the social center in Melbourne, Australia.
Overall, the first activity was about film club and it is the highest activity with the highest number of participants approximately 65 to 70 percent during the period of 2000 to 2020. The second activity was regarding martial arts it has the 35 to 40 percent participants by the period of 2000 to 2020. The third activity is amateur dramatics it has the 25 to 30 percent jobs between 2000 to 2005 but after this period it decrease and reached only five percent of participants in 2020. The fourth activity concerning table tennis it has 10 to 20 percent participants in 2005 and increase in 2010 and reached approximately 55 percent in 2020. The last activity is musical performances it starts in 2005 and gradually increase and reached to the 20 percent in 2020.
In summary, there are different 5 types of activities with the different type of participants
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main trends for the five activities, but the reporting is inconsistent and lacks analytical depth. While you mention the start and end points, the description of the data is often inaccurate (e.g., describing 'amateur dramatics' as having 'jobs' instead of participants). The overview is weak; it merely lists the activities rather than highlighting the most significant trends, such as the dramatic rise of table tennis or the decline of amateur dramatics. To improve, focus on grouping the data logically—such as comparing increasing trends versus decreasing ones—rather than listing each activity in isolation. Ensure that all data points are accurately reflected from the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, relying heavily on repetitive structures like 'The first activity was...' and 'The second activity was...'. There is a lack of linking words to show contrast or sequence, which makes the text feel like a list rather than a cohesive report. The final summary paragraph is extremely brief and does not effectively synthesise the information presented. To improve, use a wider variety of transition signals (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Meanwhile', 'Subsequently') to connect your sentences and paragraphs more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, often relying on the same phrases throughout the text. There are also significant word-choice errors, such as using 'jobs' instead of 'participants' or 'percent' when the graph likely refers to raw numbers. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure that your terminology is appropriate for the context of a data report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'it decrease' instead of 'it decreased'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'illustrates the information of number participants'). There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of past tense when describing historical data. Practising the use of relative clauses or complex sentences with 'while' or 'although' would help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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