Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates data about the involvement in various parts of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

overall, film club and table tennis had largest numbers of participants, whereas a amateur dramatics and Musical peformance had lowest candidates.

In 2000, the number of participants in film club was just above 60%, but in 2010 it dipped below 60%. By 2015 and 2020 it again rose almost reaching 70%. The candidates in Martial arts was at approximately 37% in 2000. In 2010, it almost reached 40% but in 2019 and 2020, it declined slightly hovering around between 30% and 40%. In contrast Amateur dramatics faced steady decline over the period. In 2000, participants were just below 30%, however by 2020, it was below 10%.

Table tennis had only around 26% of participant. It remaind at 20% in 2005 and 2010 but after 2010 it surged dramatically reaching above 50% in 2020. Compared to table tennis musical performances had no participants at all, but in 2010, participants were at 10%. By 2020, the candidates in this almost reached 20%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including trends and comparisons. You successfully identified the main trends for each activity and provided specific data points to support your descriptions. However, the overview is slightly weak; while you mention the highest and lowest participants, it lacks a clear summary of the overall trends (e.g., the general growth in popularity for some activities versus the decline in others). To improve, ensure your overview captures the 'big picture' more effectively. The data points are generally accurate, though ensure you are consistent with the units provided in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with each focusing on specific activities. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'By 2020', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by grouping activities with similar trends together rather than listing them individually. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'the candidates in this', which lacks a clear antecedent. Strengthening the use of transition signals would help the progression of ideas feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'surged', 'declined', and 'hovering'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'involvement in various parts of activities' and 'lowest candidates' (where 'lowest participation' would be more accurate). There are also minor spelling errors like 'peformance' and 'remaind'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary choices are consistently appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'film club and table tennis had largest numbers', 'Musical peformance had lowest candidates') and article usage. Some sentences are slightly clunky, such as 'hovering around between 30% and 40%'. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and pluralization, and try to incorporate a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy.

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