Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of five activities in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020 at a social centre.
Overall, film club remained the highest activity through the given period. Table tennis experience rapidly growth. Whereas, Amateur dramatics declined significantly.
In 2000, Film club stood at peak of around 65 participant despite declining in 2010 to 60 participant it fall back to the original number of 65 by 2020. Martial arts trend fluctuated in general through out starting at almost 38 participant in 2000 and finishing at same number by 2020.
Amateur dramatic initially at around 28 participant in 2000 further rose to 30 participant in 2005 before experienced the biggest fall among all activity dropped to almost 5 participant by 2020. Additionally, Table tennis at about 18 participant in 2000. The number surged from around 20 participant in 2010 to about 50 participant by 2020. Meanwhile, Musical performances trend started in 2005 number rise from 0 in 2005 to 12 participant by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the overall trends and specific data points for the five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the significant decline in amateur dramatics. However, the report could be improved by ensuring more precise data reporting. For instance, stating 'around 65 participant' is slightly vague, and there are minor inaccuracies in describing the trends, such as stating the film club 'declined in 2010 to 60' when the graph shows a more stable trend. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons between categories are more explicit rather than just listing data for each activity individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally clear, and you use some cohesive devices like 'Whereas', 'Additionally', and 'Meanwhile' to link information. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is functional, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to show contrast or similarity more naturally. Overall, the structure is easy to follow, but the flow between sentences occasionally feels disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuated', 'surged', and 'declined'. However, there are frequent errors in word form and collocation, such as 'Table tennis experience rapidly growth' (should be 'experienced rapid growth') and 'participant' used instead of the plural 'participants'. These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the data. To improve, focus on using the correct grammatical form of words and expanding your range of reporting verbs and adverbs to describe trends with more precision and variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'Film club stood at peak' (missing article) and 'number rise from 0' (should be 'rose'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are instances where sentence boundaries are unclear. The errors are frequent enough to be noticeable, but they rarely impede communication. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, specifically pluralization and verb tense usage.
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