Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph shows number of participants in the different activities at on the social centre in melbourne, australia the period of 2000 to 2020.

In this graph amateur dramatis activity 30 people participate moreover stable activity upto 2005 but slowly decline and end of the 2020 that is lowest.

Another side table tenis highly grow in 2020 to all other activities. In the table tenis only 15 to 18 players but increase highest. Music performance started in 2005 and i think in this curriculum graph line show step wise growing. In another side material arts low to rise and rise to decline line create.

In the conclusion, the above graph shows ehich activity highly active to the year passing and which one is slightly declined. From my perspective, in the future table tenis, music performance both are cariculum participate. However this is the out door activitys and in future help to improve skill and communication

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it attempts to describe individual activities, the information is often inaccurate or difficult to follow, such as the claim that amateur dramatics ended at the lowest point or the confusing description of martial arts. The response lacks a professional tone and includes personal opinions ('I think', 'From my perspective'), which are inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. Key features are not clearly highlighted or compared effectively, leading to a failure to fully address the requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is poorly organized. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed and lacks logical flow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'another side' to introduce new points. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of data. The conclusion introduces irrelevant personal opinions rather than summarizing the main features of the graph, which further disrupts the coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'dramatis', 'tenis', 'material arts', 'ehich', 'cariculum') and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'highly grow', 'step wise growing'). The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe trends, such as 'low to rise and rise to decline', which is imprecise. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors are persistent throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response relies on simple sentence structures, and even these are frequently marred by significant grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'line show step wise growing' instead of 'the line shows a steady increase'). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and a lack of proper capitalization for proper nouns like 'Melbourne' and 'Australia'. The frequency of errors is high, making the text difficult to read and understand.

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