Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line chart illustrates the number of individuals participants in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it's clear that the members of Table tennis significantly increased. However, the figures of Amateur dramatics significantly decreased by 2020. The members of Musical performances slightly increased. Furthermore, the individuals of Film club and Martial arts remained stable.
In 2000, the number of Table tennis figures stood at around 15 members, and rose up to around 20 figures by 2010. After that, the members of Table tennis dramatically increased and reached approximate 53 members. In contrast, The members of Amateur started around 18, and gradually fell off around 8 at the end of 2020. Furthermore, the individuals of Musical performances recorded 0 in 2005. After that, it gradually increased and reached to near 20 members by 2020.
The film club recorded around 65 members in 2000, and remained stable through out the period with near 68 members. Similarly, the members of Martial arts started around 35 members and remained stable by the end of 2020 with around 35 members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the significant increase in Table tennis and the stability of the Film club. However, the overview is slightly repetitive in its structure. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview synthesizes the information more effectively rather than listing each activity individually. You have correctly selected and reported the main features, and the comparisons made between the activities are relevant and accurate, meeting the requirements for a clear summary of the provided data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', and 'Similarly' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is slightly unbalanced, and some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, though the way you refer to the data points (e.g., 'the individuals of Film club') is occasionally awkward, which slightly affects the flow of information. Overall, the progression of ideas is logical, and the structure is easy to follow throughout the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'dramatically increased', 'remained stable', and 'gradually fell off'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'the individuals of Film club' or 'the number of Table tennis figures'. These phrases are not natural in an academic context. To improve, focus on using more precise nouns to describe the data, such as 'participation levels' or 'attendance figures', rather than 'individuals' or 'figures' when referring to the activities themselves.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the members of Table tennis significantly increased' (should be 'participation in Table tennis') and 'reached approximate 53 members' (should be 'approximately 53'). Additionally, there are minor issues with prepositions and articles, such as 'reached to near 20 members'. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.
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