Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the changes of the number of participants for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it was evident that both film club and martial art participants remained steady in 20 years even though film club remained the highest numbered of all. Moreover, table tennis and musical performances showed increment in data though for music data appeared after several years. Conversely, Amateur dramatics was noted as the only activity with declined data.

Foremost, film club was seen as the significant popular activity as it had the highest participant of 60 to 70 numbers in all these 20 years. Even though martial arts were almost half of the number of film club members it has the identical steady pattern as it stayed only between 30 to 40 numbers in 2000 to 2020.

Additionally, table tennis remained constant (under number 20) till 2010 then rose sharply to more than number 50 which shows approximately 30 number of increment. While musical performance also rose but it's data existed from the year 2005 number 0 to gradually increasing to almost 15 in the year 2020. Amateur dramatics was the only activity with declined members as remained between number 20 to 30 then descended sharply to less than number 10.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the stability of the film club and the sharp rise in table tennis. However, the report could be improved by providing more precise data points. For instance, instead of saying '60 to 70 numbers', you should specify the exact values where possible. Additionally, the description of the 'musical performance' starting in 2005 is accurate, but the comparison between categories could be more integrated to better highlight the relative changes over the 20-year period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Conversely', and 'Additionally' to transition between ideas. However, some of the linking is slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing could be more balanced. The overview is clear, but the flow between the description of the film club and martial arts could be smoother. Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the structure serves the purpose of the report well.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'increment', 'declined', and 'remained steady'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'highest numbered of all' (should be 'highest number of participants') and 'data appeared' (should be 'participation began'). The repetition of the word 'number' throughout the text is noticeable and limits the sophistication of your writing. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would help improve your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'it has the identical steady pattern' should be 'it had' to maintain tense consistency with the past period. There are also issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'in 20 years' (should be 'over the 20-year period') and 'it's data' (should be 'its data'). Despite these errors, the grammar does not impede communication, and you show a reasonable attempt at using complex structures.

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