Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The illustration depicts the numbers of participants in various activities at a particular social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall,after 2010 amateur dramatics had decreased dramatically while the table tennis had rose significantly from same time and the film club had highest participants throughout the period.

Between 2000 to 2005, the film club had slightly decreased and reached 60 participant, martial arts increased after the short declined. In the ameteur dramatics had increased before slightly fell.Furthermore table tennis had slightly surge and became stable.Moreover the musical performances had 0 participants till 2005 and increased slightly.

From 2010 to 2020 film club had steadily rose before reached peak between 70 to 60, martial arts constant fluctuated and reached 40 to 30. In ameteur dramatics had declined dramatically reached it lowest point and reached slightly above 0. Moreover table tennis had surge significantly reached peak between 60 to 50. Furthermore musical performances had inclined steadily reached between 20 to 10.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all activities. However, the reporting of data is often imprecise, such as 'between 70 to 60' or 'between 20 to 10', which lacks the clarity required for a Band 7. While the main features are identified, the overview is slightly confusing due to grammatical errors, and the comparison between categories could be more effectively integrated. The response addresses the prompt, but the lack of precision in describing the data points limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'Furthermore' and 'Moreover' at the start of sentences. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel disjointed. While there is an overall attempt at logical sequencing, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional confusion in referencing (e.g., 'same time') prevent a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and word form errors, such as 'table tennis had rose' (should be 'risen'), 'short declined' (should be 'short decline'), and 'constant fluctuated' (should be 'constantly fluctuated'). The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but the frequent errors in collocation and word form indicate a lack of control over more complex lexical items. Spelling errors like 'ameteur' also detract from the overall quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'had rose', 'had surge', 'had inclined') and sentence structure. Many sentences are missing articles or contain incorrect prepositions. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The control of grammar is inconsistent, and the high frequency of errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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