Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the information on the number of participates for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period of 2000 to 2020.
There are three activities Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances who's number of participants fluctuated drastically throughout this period. In contrast there are two activities which had slightly variation in data. Film club had highest number of participants while Musical performances had lowest number of participants in 2005, However the numbers increased gradually.
Film club and Martial arts had highest number of participants in comparison to other activities. There participants number fluctuated slightly but at the end of 2020 the participants are approximately same. In 2010 Film club hits its lowest point around 60 while Martial arts has highest number of participants around 40.
The other three activity participants
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly with an unfinished sentence. While you attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the data. You failed to cover all the activities shown in the graph, leaving the report unbalanced. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the main trends in the introduction or overview paragraph and complete all sections of your analysis. You must also ensure that you reach the minimum word count to avoid a penalty.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is inconsistent, and the final paragraph is incomplete, which disrupts the flow of information. While you use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast' and 'However', their usage is sometimes awkward or grammatically incorrect. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the data is presented in a disjointed manner. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that your comparisons are linked logically. Avoid ending your response mid-sentence, as this severely hinders the coherence of the entire piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'participants' and 'activities' without much variation. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'participates' (a verb) instead of 'participants' (a noun) and 'slightly variation' instead of 'slight variation'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately (e.g., using 'hits its lowest point' is acceptable, but the surrounding context is weak). To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of synonyms and collocations related to data description, such as 'fluctuated significantly', 'remained stable', or 'reached a peak'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'who's number' (should be 'whose'), 'there participants number' (should be 'their participant numbers'), and 'are approximately same' (missing the article 'the'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors in subject-verb agreement and punctuation. To improve, focus on basic accuracy, particularly with possessive pronouns (their vs. there) and articles. Practice constructing error-free simple sentences before attempting more complex structures.
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