Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line chart illustrates the information about the distinct activities held at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia where a specific amount of individuals participated from 2000 to 2020. The data can be calibrated in numbers.
Overall, the maximum number of individuals joined the Film club while the minimun were Musical performances.
Having a concise look at the line chart it is evident that Film club tops the list by more than 60 people from 2000 to 2020. However, folks who chose Martial arts were above 30 in the year 2000 and gradually declined in 2005 whereas the number of people again rose in 2010 with some fluctuations throughout 2020.
Furthermore, Amateur dramatics was below 30 in 2000 and slightly inclined in 2005 while it was drastically decreased in 2020. However, Table tennis participants were under 20 in the starting year followed by almost 20 in 2005 and tremendous growth in the following years. Nevertheless, the another event that is Musical performances were down at 0 in the first five years and then steadily showed the upward trend from 2025 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the overall dominance of the Film club and the trends for other activities. However, the response contains significant factual inaccuracies. For instance, you mention that Musical performances showed an upward trend from '2025 to 2020', which is chronologically impossible given the task period. Additionally, your description of the data points is sometimes vague (e.g., 'above 30' or 'under 20'), lacking the precision required for a higher band. To improve, ensure that you accurately interpret the years and data points provided in the visual prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Furthermore', and 'Nevertheless' to link ideas. However, the use of these connectors is sometimes mechanical or slightly misused, such as starting a sentence with 'Nevertheless' when the preceding information does not necessarily contrast with the next point. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal logic within paragraphs could be tightened to ensure a smoother flow between the specific data points mentioned.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'drastically', and 'tremendous growth'. However, there are instances of informal or imprecise word choices, such as 'folks' instead of 'participants' or 'individuals', and 'concise look' which is not the standard collocation for introducing a report. Some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'The data can be calibrated in numbers', which does not fit the context of describing a graph. Expanding your range of academic collocations would help elevate your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the another event... were down') and incorrect preposition usage. There are also errors in tense consistency and logical phrasing, such as the mention of '2025' which is outside the provided data range. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. Focus on proofreading for basic agreement and tense accuracy.
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