Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph shows participation of people in different activities, which is very informative. As we can see film club participation is more or less same in this period but a sharp decline in amateur dramatics. So it shows people like films over amateur dramatics. Martial arts craze is more or less same as this graph shows in 20 years but a major shift in table tennis lovers. as graph shows surge in table tennis participants after 2010 is more than double in comparison with year 2000 and 2020. Interesting feature of this graph shows a new thing after 2005 is musical performances. the participation in musical shows is continue increasing year over year and in 2020 its almost same numbers of people how many were in table tennis participation in year 2000. At the end we can say that this graph shows film club participation is still on the top after 20 years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the decline in amateur dramatics and the rise in table tennis and musical performances. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. The report relies on informal language ('new thing', 'craze') rather than objective, analytical reporting. While the key features are identified, the lack of a structured introduction and a clear concluding summary limits the response. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends in the introduction and use more precise language to describe the data points rather than subjective commentary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which is essential for a clear academic report. The ideas are presented in a single block, making it difficult to follow the progression of information. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic or mechanical way, such as 'At the end' or 'as graph shows'. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the flow between sentences is often abrupt. To improve, you should organise your report into at least three paragraphs: an introduction, a body paragraph for the main trends, and a concluding summary. Use a wider range of cohesive devices like 'in contrast', 'subsequently', or 'furthermore' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. Phrases like 'more or less same' and 'new thing' are too informal for an Academic Task 1 report. There is a lack of precision in describing the data, and some word choices are awkward, such as 'table tennis lovers' or 'musical shows is continue increasing'. To reach a higher band, you need to use more academic vocabulary related to trends and data, such as 'remained stable', 'fluctuated', 'experienced a surge', or 'witnessed a significant decline'. Avoid conversational fillers and focus on using precise terminology to describe the changes in participation numbers.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('musical shows is continue increasing'), missing articles ('as graph shows'), and awkward sentence structures ('its almost same numbers of people how many were in table tennis'). The range of sentence structures is limited, with most sentences being simple or poorly constructed compound sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that articles are used correctly. Practice using complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve your grammatical range.
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