Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the graph illustrate in one social centre in Melbour number of participants for different activities, Australia for the period 2000 to
2020.
Overall, In 2000 around 65% people participants in Film club but 2010 until around 60% decreased, and 2010 to 2020 until 70% increase. from 2005 Musical performances regular increase until 2020.
In Musical performances peoples from 2005 can participants. Musical performances ratio from 2005 regular increased until 2020. In table tennis around 15% stated and slowly increased until 2005 and from 2005 to 2010 until ratio stable, from 2010 to until 2020 Table tennis ratio around 55% increased. In Amateur dramatics around 25% started and 30% increased until 2005, from 2005 Amateur dramatics ratio reguler decreused until 2020.
From 2000 martial arts recio fluctuated until 2020. Film club recio started from around 65% and small decreuse until 2010. And from 2010 recio incresed until 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify main features, the reporting is often confusing and lacks clarity. For example, the description of the Film club and Table tennis trends is difficult to follow due to inaccurate data reporting and poor sentence structure. You have not provided a clear overview of the most significant trends, and the information is presented in a fragmented way. To improve, ensure you clearly group data by trends (e.g., increasing vs. decreasing) and provide a concise summary of the overall patterns observed across the 20-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'until' and 'from'. Referencing is unclear, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'meanwhile', 'subsequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a specific, clearly defined aspect of the data to help the reader follow your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'increase' and 'decrease' without variation. There are also significant issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'recio' (ratio), 'reguler' (regular), and 'decreused' (decreased). These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to understand the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate a broader range of vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a gradual rise', and pay closer attention to the correct spelling of these terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the graph illustrate'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple and often incomplete or poorly constructed, such as 'In Musical performances peoples from 2005 can participants.' There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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