Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrate the information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.Firstly,Film club and the numbers of participants are increasing while Amateur dramatics are decreased through out the tears and decreases year by year.
Firstly,given data show the 2 activities are increases one is Film clib and second is Table tennis.The data shows table tennis activities show stromg strength and reach all time high in 2020 which is around 60m on the other hand film sector is shows growth and reach at new high at 65m.
While the Marital arts sector is shows strength and declined remakn same almost at 2020.Amature dramatics activity is increas from 2000 to 2005 after thats it deckine very badly and reach at time low in 2020 which is around 5m.At last mudical performance shows no change in 2000 to 2005 after tthat it increases rapifly next 15 years and in 2002 it reach at 13.5m.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, but the analysis is inconsistent and contains significant inaccuracies. For example, you state that 'Amateur dramatics are decreased through out the tears', but the data shows an initial increase. Furthermore, the description of the trends is often confusing, such as claiming 'Marital arts sector is shows strength and declined remakn same'. The report lacks a clear overview of the main trends, which is essential for a high band score. To improve, ensure you accurately identify the starting and ending points of each trend and provide a clear summary paragraph that highlights the most significant changes across the entire period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often misused, such as starting two consecutive paragraphs with 'Firstly'. The referencing is also unclear; for instance, 'the 2 activities are increases' is grammatically awkward and makes the flow of information difficult to follow. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Subsequently', 'Meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. The current structure feels disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of the different activities.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'clib' for 'club', 'stromg' for 'strong', 'mudical' for 'musical', and 'rapifly' for 'rapidly'. These errors occasionally impede communication. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends precisely; for example, using 'shows strength' repeatedly is vague. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing graphs, such as 'experienced a steady decline' or 'reached a peak of'. You should also proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes, as these significantly lower the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There is a lack of control over basic grammatical structures. You frequently omit articles or use them incorrectly, and there are many errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the graph illustrate' instead of 'illustrates' and 'sector is shows' instead of 'sector shows'. The sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, which makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence construction before attempting more complex structures. Ensure that your subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense for past data (e.g., 'decreased' instead of 'is decreased').
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