Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph depicts the information regarding the people who took part in five various activities in Melbourne, Australia, between year of 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that majority of individuals chose film club between the given period of time. while musicial perference was least popular among australian individual.
To begin with, the number of the paricipate were 70 who prefered film club activities it remained stable according to given prioed from 2000 to 2020. Martial arts also popular among folk which was 35 to 40 in number 20 to 2020.
However, Amateur dramatics was chosen by 25 individials from 2000 to 2005. after, that it slightly increased in final year and the number of people were solely 5 who interst in this sector in 2010. There was a significant change can be seen in the paricipate who interestel in Table tennis in intial year 15 people chose this field and 2010 in sharply increase rose upto 50 in 2020. Musicel peferences 5 number took in activities and 2020 it rise by only 5 in number
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all five activities and attempts to report main features. However, the data interpretation is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, stating that Amateur dramatics had 25 individuals and then 'solely 5' in 2010 is difficult to follow, and the description of the film club as 'stable' is a reasonable observation, but the overall summary lacks precision. The report fails to clearly distinguish between the trends of the different categories, and some data points are misread or poorly articulated, which hinders the clarity of the overview.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'after, that it slightly increased'. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different activities over the twenty-year period. The overall structure is present but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'musicial perference', 'paricipate', 'interestel'). The student relies on basic terminology and struggles to use precise language to describe trends (e.g., 'sharply increase rose upto'). While the meaning is generally discernible, the lack of control over word forms and the high frequency of spelling errors significantly impact the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of the paricipate were 70'), incorrect tense usage, and fragmented sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors often cause difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and commas. The control of grammar is weak, and the frequent errors impede the flow of information.
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