Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Bar chat illustrate the number of participants that take part in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne for the period 2000 to 2020.
To start, The Musical performances does not participate in 2000 after that only 10 participants participate in 2010 at social centre and in 2020 it shows increase 20 participant takes part.The table tennis is the activity which shows the the rise in participants because in 2010 only 20 participants take part but in 2020 approximately 55 participants take part.The amateur dramatics is the activity which shows decrease point year by year.In 2005 the 30 participants takes part but in 2020 it becomes below then 10 participants.The material arts is the activity which shows equally balance of participants till 2020.In 2000 the 38 participants take part and then it moves year by year with this average till 2020.The film club is the activity in which participants shows their much interest because it start with 63 participant in 2000 and it end with approximately 68 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the presentation is somewhat mechanical. While you identify trends for each activity, the overview is missing. An effective Task 1 response should include an introductory statement, a clear overview of the main trends (e.g., which activities increased vs. decreased), and then detailed body paragraphs. You have listed the data for each category individually, which makes it difficult for the reader to compare the activities effectively. To improve, group the activities by their trends (e.g., those that increased versus those that declined) rather than listing them one by one.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear paragraph structure, as it is presented as a single block of text. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on 'the activity which shows' or 'in [year] the [number] participants'. There is little logical progression between sentences, and the transition between different activities feels abrupt. To improve, use paragraph breaks to separate the introduction/overview from the body paragraphs and employ a wider range of linking words such as 'conversely', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'participants take part' and 'the activity which shows'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'material arts' (likely meaning 'martial arts') and 'equally balance'. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a significant rise', or 'experienced a gradual decline'. Expanding your range of verbs and nouns will help you describe the data with more sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The Musical performances does not participate', '20 participant takes part') and article usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are punctuated correctly. Incorporating more complex structures, such as relative clauses or comparative forms, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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