Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The line graph depicts the changes in the number of individual's participating in distinct activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is evident that, Film club and table tennis followed upward trajectories, whereas amateur dramatics experienced an overall decline.

Beginning with the most popular activity, the film club started with roughly 64 participants in 2000. Despite a marginal dip to exactly 60 members in 2010 and participation gradually recovered, finishing the period at its peak with approximately 65. Moreover, the least familiar activity, the musical performance used to have zero members in 2000, which started to increase in 2005 and accounted for roughly 27 members in 2020.

Meanwhile, interest in martial arts remained remarkably stable throughout the two decades. The number of participants hovered consistently around the 35-mark, showing only negligible fluctuations between 2000 and 2020. Furthermore, the table tennis experienced massive incline across the period of 20 years, starting from approximately 27 participants and culminated in 2020 with more than 50 members. while, amateur dramatics began with 27 attendees which terribly declined till the year 2020 and only 6 respondents remained.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the upward trajectory of table tennis and the decline of amateur dramatics. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. However, the description of the film club is slightly inaccurate; you mentioned it finished at its peak, but the graph shows it started at 64 and ended at approximately 65, which is a very minor difference, yet the description of the 'dip' and 'recovery' is well-handled. You have made relevant comparisons between the activities, which is essential for a high score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Beginning with', 'Moreover', 'Meanwhile', and 'Furthermore' helps to guide the reader through the data. However, there are some minor issues with flow; for instance, the sentence starting with 'while, amateur dramatics' is a sentence fragment and lacks a proper transition from the previous clause. Despite this, the progression of ideas is logical, and the paragraphing is used effectively to group related information.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'upward trajectories', 'marginal dip', 'negligible fluctuations', and 'culminated'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'individual's participating' (should be 'individuals participating') and 'terribly declined' (which is not a standard collocation for describing data). Using 'terribly' is too informal and emotive for an academic report. Improving your precision with collocations and avoiding informal adverbs will help you reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that slightly impede the flow, such as 'the table tennis experienced massive incline' (missing article 'a' and 'the' is unnecessary) and 'the musical performance used to have zero members' (the phrase 'used to' is better suited for narrative than data description). Additionally, there are punctuation errors, such as the lowercase 'w' in 'while' at the start of a sentence. While these errors do not prevent understanding, they occur frequently enough to limit the score.

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