Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities( Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical performances ) at a particular centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that Musical performances increased over the period. Table tennis rose slightly till 2010 and after it grew significantly during the period. In contrast, Amateur dramatics surged till 2005 after surging it declined considerably. Martial arts experienced some fluctuations.
Musical performances experienced substantial growth rising from 0% in 2005 to almost 15% by the end of the period while Amateur dramatics witnessed a slight increase till 2005 to approximately 27% and after it dropped gradually over the period.
Table tennis surged gradually rising from just 16% in 2000 to 20% till 2010 and after it witnessed a sharp rise to approximately 51% over the period. Martial arts fluctuated considerably over the period starting from almost 35% in 2000 to 36% in 2020. Film club topped the chart with approximately 65% and was considerably higher than all the other activities which started with almost 65% and ended with a 66% over the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the growth of musical performances and the sharp rise in table tennis. However, the description of the film club is slightly confusing; you mention it 'topped the chart' with 65% but then state it 'started with almost 65% and ended with a 66%'. This is repetitive and lacks clarity regarding its overall trend compared to other categories. To improve, ensure that data points are clearly linked to specific years and avoid contradictory or redundant phrasing when describing the same trend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different trends. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'and after it grew' or 'and after it witnessed'. Using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases (e.g., 'subsequently', 'following this period', 'in contrast to this') would improve the flow between sentences and make the progression of ideas feel more natural and sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'surged', 'fluctuations', and 'substantial growth' effectively. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation. For example, 'surging it declined' is awkward, and 'topped the chart' is used somewhat repetitively. There is also a minor error in the use of '0%' for musical performances, which might be a misinterpretation of the graph's starting point. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is consistently accurate when describing statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'after it grew significantly during the period' and 'after it dropped gradually'. The phrase 'after surging it declined' is also grammatically weak. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but some sentences are slightly clunky due to awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on refining your use of subordinate clauses and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound, particularly when describing time-based changes.
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