Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph gives detail information on the number of participants for verity of activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia during the duration of 2000 to 2020. The graph is plotted in the 2D plane with two axis where the X-axis shows the year while Y-axis shows the number of participants.
The graph shows the data of five different activities and each activities is marked up by unique symbol. According to the give information the highest number of participants throughout the whole duration is film club. During the initial 2000s the martial arts participants is around 36 and throughout the whole duration the varies between 30 to 40. While the above to activities participants graph does not shows the fluctuating data . It start around the number around 25 at initial 2000 and little hike in 2005 but , after that the no of participant decrease gradually and reach around 10 in the 2020s. But the exact opposite case happens with table tennis. It has significant low value at the 2000s but it values gradually increase as time pass. For the musical performance the case is different during 2000 to 2005 there is no participants. After that the number of participants goes increasing as the time passes and reach around 15 at the end of 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends for the five activities. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you correctly identify the film club as the highest participant group and note the trends for table tennis and musical performance, the description of the other activities is vague and lacks precision. For instance, referring to 'the above to activities' is confusing, and the data points mentioned (e.g., 'around 36') are not always clearly linked to the specific activity. To reach a higher band, ensure that all trends are clearly described with accurate data points and that comparisons between categories are more explicit throughout the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'the above to activities' and 'the exact opposite case happens' are used to link ideas, but they do not always clearly refer back to the correct information. Additionally, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is somewhat abrupt. Improving the flow by using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Conversely') and ensuring that referencing is precise would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'verity' instead of 'variety', 'center' instead of 'centre') and awkward phrasing such as 'marked up by unique symbol' and 'little hike'. While you successfully use terms like 'fluctuating' and 'gradually', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'a steady decline' or 'a significant upward trend', rather than relying on informal descriptions like 'little hike'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'each activities is', 'the martial arts participants is'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'The graph is plotted in the 2D plane with two axis'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and pluralisation errors to improve accuracy.
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