Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graphical representation demonstrates the details about the count of participants for different events at a social center located in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

The participants in the film club were considerably higher over the period which accounted for 63 in 2000. The number declined till 2010 which stands for 60 participants, the number then increased and reached to the maximum number of participants that is 63 in 2020. In the case of martial arts, the number was 46 in 2000 which plunged to 31 in 2005 and further rose to 32 participants. The numbers stand at 35 in 2015 and there was an insignificant change in the number by 2020. In year 2000, 37 participants are listed for the amateur dramatics, then the number drastically falls and reached the lowest number of participants that is 4 only.

Moving further, in case of table tennis, the number was less during the year 2000 which stands for 17 participants only. After that, there is significant increase in the count of participants which reached at 52 by 2020. During the year 2000 and 2005, there were hardly any performers for musical event. The number then increased to 11, 13 and 14 participants in the year 2010, 2015 and 2020 respectively.

Overall, the maximum number of participants are listed in the event of film during the year 2020. On the other hand, no participant was interested in the musical events in 2000 and 2005.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the graph and provided a clear overview. You covered all categories (film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical events) and made relevant comparisons. However, the report is somewhat descriptive, listing data points rather than synthesising the information. For instance, instead of listing every fluctuation for martial arts, you could group trends more effectively. The overview is placed at the end; while acceptable, it is often more effective to place it immediately after the introduction to clearly signal the main trends to the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organised into paragraphs, with each focusing on specific activities. You use transition signals such as 'Moving further' and 'Overall' to guide the reader. However, some cohesive devices are slightly mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'the number was' or 'the number then'. To improve, try to vary your referencing by using pronouns or synonyms to avoid repeating 'the number' at the start of every sentence. The progression of ideas is clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother with more varied linking phrases.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'graphical representation', 'plunged', 'drastically', and 'insignificant change'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'the count of participants' is slightly unnatural; 'the number of participants' or 'participation levels' would be better. Additionally, 'the number declined till 2010 which stands for 60' is grammatically awkward. Expanding your range to include more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to trends would help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally affect the flow. For example, 'the number then increased and reached to the maximum number' contains an unnecessary preposition ('to'). You also have issues with tense consistency and article usage, such as 'In year 2000' (should be 'In the year 2000') and 'in case of table tennis' (should be 'in the case of'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score.

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