Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph tracks data on the numbers of participants for various activities at one communal region in Melbourne, Australia for the era between 2000 and 2001.
Overall, the amateur dramatics experienced a sharp decline in the number of attendees as compared to all zones in the last year. In addition, in material arts a constant fluctuation can be seen throughout the time period. Musical performance attendees did not take part in the first year.
As it is clearly seen from the data that film club in 2000 had highest 65 participants which were rise to to 67 in 2020.However, table tennis started from about 18 members in 2000 and ended with approximately 53 in the 2020.Since musical zone gained zero members in 2005 but still managed to had more members than amateur's group which even hadf12 members in the 2000.lLastly,materail arts undergo constant fluctuation starting from 38 members in 2000 to 39 members in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the trends for the film club and table tennis. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, the text states the film club had 65 participants in 2000 and 67 in 2020, but the graph shows different values. Additionally, the time period is incorrectly identified as '2000 to 2001' in the introduction, despite the prompt stating 2000 to 2020. The summary of the amateur dramatics and martial arts is somewhat confusing, and the overall overview lacks clarity regarding the general trends across all categories. More precise data extraction and a clearer summary of the overall trends are needed to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'As it is clearly seen from the data that' are clunky, and the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the mention of 'all zones' and 'musical zone', which does not align well with the labels provided in the graph. While there is an attempt at logical progression, the lack of smooth transitions and some awkward phrasing hinder the overall flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'materail' instead of 'martial' and 'hadf12' which appears to be a typo. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'highest', 'rise', and 'fluctuation'. To improve, you should incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to data analysis, such as 'experienced a marginal increase' or 'remained relatively stable'. The repetition of 'members' and 'participants' also suggests a need for a wider range of synonyms to describe the data points.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'managed to had more members' (incorrect verb form), 'which were rise to to 67' (incorrect tense and structure), and 'amateur's group' (incorrect possessive usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around numbers and commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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