Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the information of the number of participants for Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the highest number of participants through out the time was in film club. While, Amateur dramatics faced decline after 2010 whereas, Table tennis experienced a huge increase. In contrast, Martial art faced slight fluctuation. Furthermore, Musical performances started late and a normal increase can be seen.

Film club dominates all years starting with 60 number of participants fell a bit in 2010 before again reaching its approximatley old position. Table tennis started at more than 10 participants in 2000 increased dramatically after 2010 and reached to more than 50 participants in 2020. In comparison, Amateur dramatics begin with about 25 candidates increased a little and faced a huge decline after 2010 and reached to 5 in 2020. Whereas, Martial arts remained almost same with a little ups and downs. Musical performances joined in 2005 from bottom and increased moderatelly and reported to had more than 10 participants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories (Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performances) and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the decline in Amateur dramatics versus the rise in Table tennis. To reach a higher band, ensure your data reporting is more precise. For example, stating 'more than 10' or 'approximatley old position' is vague. Using specific figures from the graph, such as 'starting at 60' or 'peaking at 50', would demonstrate a more thorough analysis of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices like 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', and 'Whereas' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is clear, but the internal structure of the second body paragraph is a bit repetitive in its sentence construction. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the former', 'the latter') is used more effectively would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuation', 'dominates', and 'dramatically'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'approximatley old position' and 'reported to had'. Additionally, some phrasing is slightly unnatural, such as 'started late' or 'joined in 2005 from bottom'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your word forms are grammatically correct. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adverbs would also help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'the information of the number' (should be 'information on'), 'Martial art faced' (should be 'Martial arts'), and 'reported to had' (should be 'reported to have'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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