Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrate information on the of participants for different activites at one social centre in melbourne , australia. The flim club remain constant all over years whereas the martial arts has many flactuation over the years.
IN the graph ,data of number of participants is on x axis and year are on y axis . However, the number pf particpants for different activities in 2000 to 2020 are mention with the help of lines. Firstly, the film club remain same for all years and has no change whereas on other hand the martial arts has flactuation in over all years. Futher the amateur dramatics were 25 participants in the year 2000 which slightly drop to 15 in year 2010 . In addition table tennis activity has 15 participants in the year 2000 which remain same till 2010 and then spike to 50 in year 2020 on other hand in 2005 there were 0 participants in musical performances but till 2020 it
raise to 15 participants.
To sum up , the number of paticipants was highest in the film club which also be same from all years and also the lowest is in musical perfomance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying main features, such as the stability of the film club and the fluctuations in other activities. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends. The description of the data is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in reporting figures (e.g., 'spike to 50' is a good observation, but the overall analysis is hindered by inaccurate descriptions of the graph's axes). The response covers all parts of the task, but the lack of a clear, analytical overview prevents it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is disrupted by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the misuse of 'on other hand' and 'Futher'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a smooth progression of ideas. While the reader can follow the general intent, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the somewhat disjointed sentence structure limit the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'remain same', 'has', and 'number'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'flim', 'activites', 'flactuation', 'paticipants', and 'perfomance'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the frequent spelling mistakes and the lack of varied, topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', or 'fluctuate') indicate a limited lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate', 'film club remain'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the text difficult to read, though they do not completely impede communication. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is necessary.
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