Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this graph demonstrate the data of different people involved in number of activities at one social Centre in the Australian city Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

overall, the number of people from all club increased through the whole period but the only one group of people is decreased in that period that is Amateur dramatics but other participants remains the same or grow with the time.

there is only one group which have the highest people and remains the same and even grow with time that is film club but there is another group who starts from the low but grow drastically with the time that is table tennis and all other groups remains the almost same and one group who decreased with the time is Amateur dramatics.

film club remains the highest people and the dramatics participants decreased with the time only one year which is 2005 where some people grow but all other year remains below than others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response provides a basic overview of the trends, but it fails to report specific data points or make meaningful comparisons. While you identify the 'film club' as the highest and 'Amateur dramatics' as the declining group, the description lacks precision. For instance, you mention 'table tennis' grows drastically, but you do not provide the starting or ending figures to support this. To improve, you must incorporate specific data from the graph (e.g., numbers of participants in 2000 vs 2020) to substantiate your claims. The report is too general and lacks the analytical depth required for a high band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between ideas is often repetitive, particularly the use of 'remains the same' and 'with the time'. There is a lack of varied cohesive devices; you rely heavily on simple conjunctions like 'but' and 'and'. To improve, use linking words such as 'in contrast', 'subsequently', or 'furthermore' to connect your sentences and ideas more effectively. The structure would also benefit from a clearer separation between the overview and the detailed body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'number of people', 'grow with the time', and 'remains the same' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range of your writing. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'demonstrate the data' (should be 'illustrates the data') and 'all club' (should be 'all clubs'). To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('this graph demonstrate', 'one group... are decreased'), missing articles ('in Melbourne'), and awkward phrasing ('the only one group of people is decreased'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or repetitive, lacking the variety of complex sentences expected at higher levels. You should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and using a wider variety of sentence structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice, to describe the data more professionally.

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