Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, most of the people were participating in film club as compared to the other activities. Musical performance was missing in 2000, after five years it appeared and sharply increased
First of all, 70 people take interest in the film club activity. And it was at the high level in 2000 to 2020. Furthermore, 38 members was involved in the martial arts activity, it was slightly decreased in 2005 but again balanced. Moreover, table tennis active was common in 2000 but, after spent some years it was sharply rose. First 19 members participate in 2000, but in 2020, 55 members participate.
On the other hand, Amateur dramatics active was sharply dropped. First, people take interested in this activity but in 2010, this activity completely fall down. Furthermore, musical performance was the one of the activity that people was not shown interest in 2000. But in 2005, people take participate in this activity and then this activity fastly flow up.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends for each activity. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention that the film club had the most participants, the description of other trends is inconsistent. For instance, you state that martial arts 'balanced' without explaining the trend clearly, and the description of table tennis is slightly confusing. To improve, focus on grouping the activities by their trends (e.g., those that increased versus those that declined) to provide a more cohesive summary of the main features rather than listing each activity individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'First of all', 'Furthermore', and 'On the other hand' are used, but they do not always logically connect the ideas. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'this activity completely fall down', where the connection to the previous sentence is weak. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear central theme that flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'take interest', 'participate', and 'shown interest'. There are also several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms, such as 'table tennis active' instead of 'table tennis activity' and 'fastly flow up'. To improve, try to use more sophisticated vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline'. Expanding your range of collocations will help you convey information more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., '38 members was involved'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'people take participate'), and awkward sentence construction. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent tense usage when describing past data. Proofreading for small errors like 'fastly' (which is not a standard adverb) will also help improve your score.
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