Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
We watch the graph and study the peoples that are the members of the graph. According to the graph they all are the major part of the graph and becomes the socitical people of the residence of Melbourne, Australia . They are in the section between the year 2000 to 2020.
To the graph, the result were shown that the every was started in 2000 and goes slowly slowly down in 2010 but after this some goes down with time to time and some others are gone down such as the Amateur dramatics and remaining were goes ups and downs in their high times.
Summarize that information after see the graph table the main components are the numbers of participants according to the different activities in the socitiy of Melbourane, Australia and the time period
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to address the task requirements effectively. It does not provide a clear overview of the data, nor does it report on the main features or make relevant comparisons between the activities. The content is largely descriptive of the graph itself rather than the data it contains. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the ability to develop ideas. The information provided is vague, lacking specific data points or trends, and fails to summarize the information as requested in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is unclear and disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as 'To the graph' or 'Summarize that information after see the graph'. The lack of clear transitions between sentences makes the text difficult to follow. The writing does not demonstrate a clear organizational pattern, and the relationship between the ideas presented is not well-managed, leading to a fragmented response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'socitical' and 'socitiy' instead of 'social' or 'society'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe data, relying on basic and inaccurate phrases like 'goes slowly slowly down' or 'goes ups and downs'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors in spelling and collocation are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the result were shown'), sentence structure, and tense usage. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The errors are pervasive and often make the meaning unclear, preventing the reader from understanding the intended message regarding the graph's data. The lack of control over basic grammar is a major barrier to effective communication.
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