Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line chart compares the number of people who participated five different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, film club recorded significantly higher number of participants over the two decades. It is also noticeable that people participation in table tennis and musical performances increased dramatically, while the figure for amateur dramatics experienced a downward trend.

In terms of participations, the figure for film club always remained peak over the period and it stood at almost same in 2000 and 2020, at approximately 65. Similarly, martial arts received almost 36 participants in 2000 and the number was almost same,in 2020, with some fluctuations in the middle period.

For the remaining figures, amateur dramatics activity attracted nearly 26 people in 2000, but the number of participant declined dramatically to almost 7 over the 20-year period. In contrast, the number of people participation in table tennis activity soared rapidly from almost 16 to just over 52 participant over the period from 2000 to 2020. Likewise, the number of participants in musical performances activity, which started in 2005, rose significantly to nearly 19 over the following years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all requirements of the task. You have identified the main features and trends, such as the stability of the film club and martial arts, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the growth in table tennis and musical performances. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. You have made relevant comparisons between the activities throughout the report. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are described with complete accuracy; for instance, the film club figure in 2020 is slightly lower than in 2000, rather than being 'almost same'. Overall, the information is well-selected and effectively presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group the activities effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'In terms of', 'Similarly', 'In contrast', and 'Likewise' to guide the reader through the comparisons. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different trends. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. The referencing is clear, and the progression of ideas from the general overview to specific details is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'downward trend', 'soared rapidly', and 'experienced a downward trend' are appropriate for describing data. However, there are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'people participation' (should be 'participation by people' or 'the number of people participating') and 'remained peak' (should be 'remained at a peak'). These errors do not impede communication, but they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would further strengthen your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'participated five different activities' (missing 'in'), 'it stood at almost same' (missing 'the'), and 'number of participant' (should be plural 'participants'). Additionally, there are some punctuation issues, such as the comma splice in 'number was almost same,in 2020'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the reader's understanding of the data. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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