Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the information on participation at the social centre for various activities, namely Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performance from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club was the most notable activity at the social centre; it showed a remarkable surge during the period. At the same time, amateur dramatics represented the steady fall. Other activities also represented some incline and decline throughout the time period.
At the beginning of the examined period, the film club activity showed 65 number of participtant, which was the highest among all the activities, and this number was maintained for 20 years and slight climb upto 68 in 2020. Similarly, martial arts also showed the same trend of 38 participants from 2000 to 2020. Over time, there was only one activity that showed a noteworthy rise in the number of participants from 25 to 55 in 2020.
Moreover, amateur dramatics contributed to the dramatic fall from 28 participants to 5 participants in the last year. Whereas Musical performances represented the least number of attendees from 2000 to 2005; after that, it showed a gradual rise upto 15 attendees in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task and identifies the main trends. You successfully highlight the overall surge in one activity and the decline in another. However, the analysis of the data is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, you mention a 'noteworthy rise' from 25 to 55, but you do not explicitly name the activity (Table tennis), which makes the report harder to follow. Additionally, the description of the Film club and Martial arts as having 'the same trend' is slightly inaccurate as they represent different starting points and final figures. To improve, ensure every trend mentioned is clearly linked to the specific category being described.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'At the beginning', 'Similarly', and 'Moreover' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when you refer to 'one activity' without naming it. The paragraphing is appropriate, and there is a clear progression of ideas from the general overview to specific data points. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that the subject of each sentence is explicitly stated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'notable activity', 'remarkable surge', and 'gradual rise'. There are some minor errors in word choice and form, such as '65 number of participtant' (should be '65 participants') and 'represented the steady fall' (should be 'represented a steady fall'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing is slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on accurate collocations and ensure that nouns and verbs are used in their correct forms to avoid minor inaccuracies that slightly distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'slight climb upto 68' (missing article/verb), '65 number of participtant' (pluralization error), and 'contributed to the dramatic fall' (inappropriate verb choice). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. You show an attempt at complex structures, but they are not always error-free. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve the accuracy of your writing significantly.
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