Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph depicts the number of participants who were involved in different activities at the social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

Firstly, for the film club, we can see that the number of participants initially decreased and around 2010 reached its absolute low, after which it started to increase until 2020. Moving to martial arts, the lowest point was 2005 and the highest point was 2010; furthermore, it again reached a lower point around 2015, after which it completely changed its direction.

However, musical performance, amateur dramatics and table tennis display different trends completely. For example, in table tennis we observe an increase until 2005, and then it plateaus around 2010, after which it sharply keeps increasing with time. For Amateur dynamics, the trend first increases until 2005, but then it reverses and keeps decreasing. Lastly, musical performance demonstrates a different trajectory compared to all its counterparts because it begins from 2005, after which it has only increased at different speeds.

Overall, we can conclude that different activities have completely different trends, which shows the dynamic nature of human participation effectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task and identifies key trends for the various activities. However, the report lacks specific data points (e.g., actual numbers or years) to support the descriptions, which is a requirement for a high band score in Academic Task 1. While the overview is present, it is somewhat generic. To improve, you should incorporate specific figures from the graph to illustrate the trends you describe, such as stating the starting or ending numbers for the activities. The comparison between categories is present but could be more analytical by grouping similar trends more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific set of activities, which helps the reader follow the progression. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moving to', 'However', and 'Lastly' are used effectively to transition between ideas. The overall structure is coherent, and the information flows well. To reach a higher band, ensure that the referencing is precise and that the logical progression within paragraphs is maintained without relying on repetitive structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'trajectory', 'plateaus', and 'counterparts'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'Amateur dynamics' (likely referring to 'Amateur dramatics') and 'completely changed its direction', which is slightly informal. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and adverbs would enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While most sentences are clear, there are some minor grammatical issues, such as 'it sharply keeps increasing with time', which is slightly awkward. Punctuation is generally accurate, and the errors present do not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, aim to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as passive voice or more sophisticated subordinate clauses, while maintaining the high level of accuracy you have already established.

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