Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The graph depicts the number of participants for distinct activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is evident that film club had the highest participants among other activities, while musical performances had no participants in first five years. The dramatic jump was observed in amateur dramatics.

Film club had the highest number of participants (almost 65) in 2000, which remained slightly stable in 2020 after the decrease in 2010. This was followed by martial arts, which had initially around 36 participants which fluctuated and remained unchanged at the end of the period.

Turning to amateur dramatics, it started at almost 26, which dipped moderately to 20 in 2010, after that, it surged considerably to around 53 in 2020, surpassed both amateur dramatics and martial arts. In comparison, table tennis had around 17 participants in 2000, which marginally rose to 20 in 2005, it then dropped significantly to almost 15 participants in 2020 after levelled off in 2010. Conversely, musical performances had no participants from 2000 to 2005, it then increased considerably to just over 10 in 2010, overtook amateur dramatics, and reached just below 20 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all categories and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the dramatic rise in amateur dramatics and the initial absence of musical performances. However, there is a factual error in your summary: you stated that musical performances 'overtook amateur dramatics,' which is not supported by the graph, as amateur dramatics ended at a much higher point. Additionally, your overview could be more precise by highlighting the most significant changes rather than just listing them. Overall, the response is well-structured and addresses the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by activity. You use a range of cohesive devices such as 'Turning to,' 'In comparison,' and 'Conversely' to guide the reader through the data. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with sentence flow, such as the comma splice in the final sentence: '...2005, it then increased...'. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring punctuation between independent clauses is correct would elevate the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe trends, using terms like 'surged,' 'fluctuated,' 'dipped,' and 'remained stable.' This allows for a clear description of the data. There are a few minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'surpassed both amateur dramatics and martial arts' when referring to the amateur dramatics category itself, which is logically confusing. While you use some less common vocabulary, there is room to incorporate more sophisticated collocations to describe the degree of change more precisely. Overall, the vocabulary is adequate and does not impede communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and sentence construction. For example, 'musical performances had no participants in first five years' is missing an article, and 'after levelled off in 2010' is grammatically incorrect. You also have some run-on sentences where clauses are joined incorrectly with commas. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the data, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation will help improve your accuracy.

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