Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrate the number of people participating for various activities at one social center in both Melbourne and Australia for decades between 2000 to 2020
Overall, film club had the highest number of participants over these decades
In 2000 there were four activities which are film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics and table tennis. eventually later from 2005 there were 5 activities musical performance was later added. The number of participants who participated in martial arts were between 30 to 40 peoples in 2000 and later in 2005 it slightly decreased then again rise up a lil bit. Amateur dramatics had between 20 to 30 participants in 2000 and it dramatically crash from 2005 to 2020 up till now.
table tennis had the best comeback than over activities because in 2000 they had participants between 10 to 20 and eventually later in 2010 it reached its peak. The number of participants participating in musical performance started from 2005 and in 2020 they had between 10 to 20 participants
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the film club's dominance and the addition of musical performance. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You mention specific trends, but the description of the data is often imprecise (e.g., 'between 30 to 40 peoples'). The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the overall trends. To improve, ensure you provide more accurate data points and group the information more logically to highlight the most significant changes over the twenty-year period rather than listing each activity individually.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. You rely on basic transitions like 'In 2000' and 'eventually later', which makes the progression feel repetitive. There is a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs. The paragraphing is also somewhat unbalanced, with a very short introduction and a body paragraph that attempts to cover all data points without clear thematic grouping. Improving the use of referencing and varied linking words would enhance the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You use basic descriptors such as 'best comeback' and 'rise up a lil bit', which are too informal for an Academic Task 1 report. There are also errors in word choice and form, such as 'peoples' instead of 'people' and 'dramatically crash' instead of 'dramatic crash' or 'declined dramatically'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise, academic vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The graph illustrate', 'film club had') and incorrect tense usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and full stops, which occasionally makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and incorporating a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, to describe the data more effectively.
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