Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph show's the different activities from Melbourne, Australia for period 2000 to 2020 for numbers of participants at one social centre.
Overall, It is evident that the numbers of participants for the activity table tennis showed the drastic increase in 2020 whereas amateur dramatics showed the dramatic decrease in 2020.
In detail, the number of participants for film club started from 60 approximately and showed the same till 2020 which is around 60. However , the participants for amateur dramatics started from around 30 in 2000 had steadily showed decrease in number around 0 in 2020, while the number of participants for martial arts started in 2000 around 30 showed fluctuations but it also showed same in 2020 which is around 30.
Similarly, the number of participants for table tennis started from around 10 in 2000 and showed gradual increase in 2020 around 50 in numbers , by contrast the number of musical performances started in 2005 from 0 and showed moderate increase in number around 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the graph, such as the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. You included data points to support your descriptions, which is essential for Task 1. However, the report could be improved by better grouping of information. For instance, you could group activities that showed growth versus those that remained stable or declined. Additionally, ensure that your overview is more comprehensive; while you mentioned two activities, a stronger overview would briefly touch upon the overall trends of all categories presented in the graph to provide a clearer summary of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You used some cohesive devices such as 'however', 'similarly', and 'by contrast' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For example, the phrase 'In detail' is a bit simplistic for an academic report. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus, rather than just listing the activities one by one. The overall progression of ideas is clear, but the cohesion could be more sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points of the graph. You used terms like 'drastic increase', 'dramatic decrease', and 'fluctuations' appropriately. However, there is some repetition of basic structures, such as 'showed the... in 2020'. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'experienced a surge', 'remained constant', or 'witnessed a decline'. There are also minor issues with word order and collocation, such as 'showed the same till 2020', which could be expressed more naturally as 'remained stable until 2020'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'The line graph show's' contains an unnecessary apostrophe, and 'showed the same till 2020' is grammatically awkward. There are also issues with article usage and preposition placement, such as 'in 2020 around 50 in numbers'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your report, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.
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