Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The presented line graph gives information on the number of participants by physical activity for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity. Also, martial arts gives fluctuated graph in five year. whereas, musical performance had started increase and after 2010 graph show the steady line.
In 2000,the film club had approximately 64 participants, making it the most popular activity. this figure then decreased slightly to around 60 in 2010 before rising gradually to about 60 in 2010 before rising gradually in 66 in 2020. meanwhile, participation in martial art fluctuated, falling from approximately 36 participants in 2000 to 32 in 2005.
Table tennis show remarkably rise after 2010. also, 2015 in 38 and before rising 53 in 2010. moreover, musical performances had rise after 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While the candidate attempts to identify main features, the reporting is incomplete and lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the data. Several figures are mentioned, but the description of trends is often confusing or inaccurate, such as the contradictory statements regarding the film club's participation numbers. The analysis is underdeveloped, and the failure to reach the word count means that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly synthesizes the main trends across the entire period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences and unclear referencing. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes incorrect manner, such as the misuse of 'whereas' and 'meanwhile' to connect unrelated ideas. The progression of information is difficult to follow, particularly in the final paragraph where the data points are presented in a fragmented way. The lack of clear transitions between the overview and the body paragraphs makes the structure feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would greatly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'graph', 'number', and 'participants'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'gives fluctuated graph' and 'show remarkably rise'. The candidate struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends, often resulting in unclear communication. To reach a higher band, the candidate should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a significant increase', or 'peaked at'. Developing a more varied and accurate lexicon is essential for clearer reporting of the graph's information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with verb tenses, such as 'musical performance had started increase' instead of 'started to increase', and subject-verb agreement errors like 'Table tennis show'. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors in syntax and punctuation. The misuse of articles and prepositions is also prevalent throughout the text. To improve, the candidate needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct tense usage and subject-verb agreement, and then gradually introduce more complex structures with greater accuracy.
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