Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the data regarding amount of volunteers that would take part in five separate activities required at social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that from the start the level of participants in film club were high than any other while the musical performances group came in the second year of survey and had the lowest number.

In year 2000 the film club sat at the top with 64 number of participants and throughout the period remained the highest. Meanwhile, below it was martial arts and for this activity 36 people were recorded fluctuated a bit and this figure remained at 38 at the end. Furthermore, the tennis activity had only 18 people but gained popularity and this number peaked at 55 in year 2020.

On the other hand Amateur dramatics had 26 members after a slight surge during this period this number dipped to about only 5 in 2020.While the musical performance activity started in 2005 with zero members and the number of participants increased throughout the period and in 2020 19 members were recorded

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided a clear overview of the data. You covered all five activities and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the film club's dominance and the contrasting trends of tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the response could be improved by ensuring more precise data reporting. For instance, stating '64 number of participants' is awkward; it should be '64 participants'. Additionally, the description of the martial arts trend as 'fluctuated a bit' is slightly vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the years provided in the graph to avoid ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group the information effectively. You used some cohesive devices such as 'Meanwhile', 'Furthermore', and 'On the other hand' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by minor punctuation errors and slightly mechanical phrasing. For example, the transition between the overview and the first body paragraph is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring consistent paragraph structure would enhance the overall readability and coherence of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main features of the graph, using terms like 'peaked', 'surge', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'amount of volunteers' should be 'number of volunteers' because participants are countable. Additionally, 'sat at the top' is a bit informal for an academic report. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your word choices are consistently appropriate for a formal report context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally affect the clarity of your writing. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'at social center' instead of 'at a social center'), incorrect preposition usage ('in year 2000' instead of 'in 2000'), and run-on sentences. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve your accuracy.

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