Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrate the information on the numbers of participants for distinctive activities at one center in one melbourne, australia for the period 2000 to 2020
After analyzing the graph, it can be seen that in 2000 the number of participants in film club were approximately 64.afterward it was steadly fell in 2010 and it was 60 . then till 2020 it again increase .in the marial arts in 2000 the amount was around 38 .the figure was minorly fluctuated till 2020 .
in amateur dramatics the amount of participants over 20 after 2005 it was steeply plummet till 2020 and the ratio was less than 10 in 2020.
Moving towards with the table tennis from 2000 to 2005 the number was minorly inclined. between 2005 and 2010 the figure platue. after that the figure steeply increase the ratio was approimately 60.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the graph, the overview is missing. An effective response should include a clear summary of the overall trends rather than just listing data points. Additionally, some data points are described with limited precision, and the lack of a concluding summary makes the report feel incomplete. To improve, ensure you include an introductory overview that highlights the most significant trends across the entire period and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'Moving towards with the table tennis'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed because the transition between the different activities lacks smooth logical connectors. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the lack of cohesive links between sentences. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number', 'amount', and 'figure'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'minorly fluctuated' and 'minorly inclined', which are not standard English expressions. Spelling errors, such as 'steadly' and 'marial arts', further detract from the quality of the writing. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'increased gradually', or 'plummeted', and ensure you check your spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('graph illustrate'), article usage ('in one melbourne'), and tense consistency. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex structures are often marred by errors, such as 'afterward it was steadly fell'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of tenses when describing past data.
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