Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants who has taken part in different activities at a social centre in 2 states (Melbourne and Australia) between 2000 to 2020.
overall, what we can see from the graph is that Film club, Table tennis and Musical performances were rising steadily , whereas Martial arts had remained stable and Amateur dramatics has fall dramatically.
If we see details, the number of participants in Film club were 65 in 2000 which increased around 67 in 2015 and remained stable in 2020.Table tennis has around 25 participants in 2000 and in 2010 it has fallen dramatically around 15 in 2010 but after that it had increased significantly to 55 in 2020.Musical performances has zero participants in 2005 but had a substantial rise in 2020 with around 15 participants.
In contrast, Martial arts have approximately 38 participants in 2000 which fallen to 35 participants in 2020.Amateur dramatics were having 25 participants in 2000 which fallen dramatically under 10 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying trends for each activity. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the interpretation of the data. For example, you state that 'Musical performances has zero participants in 2005', but the graph shows the line starting at 2000. Additionally, you misinterpret the location, stating '2 states (Melbourne and Australia)', whereas the graph clearly indicates one social centre in Melbourne, Australia. While you provide a summary and some comparisons, the lack of precision in data reporting and the misreading of the prompt's context prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully read the axis labels and data points before writing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific trends. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrast' and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'If we see details'. The use of referencing is occasionally mechanical, and the overall flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more naturally. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs feels abrupt.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends such as 'rising steadily', 'remained stable', and 'fallen dramatically'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'has fall' instead of 'has fallen' and 'were having' instead of 'had'. The range is somewhat limited, and you rely on repetitive structures to describe the data. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and ensure that your verb forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('participants who has taken part', 'Martial arts have'), incorrect tense usage ('has fall', 'were having'), and missing articles or prepositions. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent and occur in almost every sentence. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage when describing past and present trends. Reducing these frequent slips will significantly improve the clarity and professional tone of your writing.
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