Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the information on the number of people involved in different activites at one social center in malborne, asutralia for period 2000 to 2020. Evidently it is seen that the table tennis had a high intrest.
Firstly, it was seen that the flim club category in 2000 till 2020 the number involved are 65. Secondly, the martial arts activity the number of individual participated in 2000 was around 38 members then later from 2005 to 2015 was around 30 people than in 2020 it was again to around 40 members. However, in the activity of amateur dramatics it is seen that it was gradually decreasing in 2000 the participants were around 25 and from 2005 to 2020 it was seen a declination.
In the table tennis activity , the individual participated were around 15 in 2000 to 2005 later from 2010 to 2020 the members were gradually increased to around 55. Lastly, the muscial performance it was seen that in 2000 no member participated then in 2005 till 2020 the members were increased and were around 10 .
Overall, it is seen that the highest members were participated in table tennis and least members were interested in musical performance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all categories shown in the graph, but the analysis is superficial and contains factual inaccuracies. For instance, you state that the film club remained at 65 from 2000 to 2020, whereas the graph shows a clear decline. Additionally, the overall summary is contradictory; you conclude that table tennis had the highest participation, yet your data description for the film club suggests it started at 65, which would make it the highest. The report lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the selection of data points is inconsistent. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant trends (e.g., the steady decline of amateur dramatics versus the growth of table tennis) rather than listing every single data point.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'However', they are often used mechanically or to introduce information that does not follow a clear analytical path. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences feels disjointed. The overall structure would benefit from a more logical grouping of trends—for example, grouping activities that increased versus those that decreased—rather than describing each activity in isolation. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively support the development of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'was', 'were', and 'increased'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'malborne', 'asutralia', 'flim', and 'muscial', which detract from the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1. Phrases like 'it was seen a declination' are non-standard and awkward. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'experienced a downward trend', and ensure accurate spelling of proper nouns and technical terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the individual participated were around 15') and article usage. Many sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'the muscial performance it was seen that in 2000 no member participated'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and using more complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, to improve accuracy and flow.
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