Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the five different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is clear that film club followed downward trend at the beginning, then it reached highest at last, while Amateur dramatics experienced a downward trend over the period. Meanwhile, Martial arts, table tennis and musical performance increased gradually over the period of time.

Looking first at Film club, the figure declined from 65 to 60 between 2000 and 2005, then it rose up gradually to around 67 in 2020. Similarly, table tennis increased from 15 to 20 in the year of 2000 and 2010, then it reached up rapidly from 20 to around 53 between 3 years. Musical performance showed upward trend over the period of time from 0 to around 12 between 4 years.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the description is incomplete; for instance, you mention five activities in the introduction but only describe three in the body paragraphs. The data reporting is also imprecise, with vague time references like 'between 3 years' and 'between 4 years' rather than specific periods. To improve, ensure all categories mentioned in the prompt are covered and provide accurate data points for the start, end, and any significant turning points in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, which provides a basic structure. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the analysis. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Meanwhile' and 'Similarly', but they are sometimes used mechanically. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the final sentence is incomplete, ending with 'by', which disrupts the flow and coherence of the text. More careful proofreading and a more logical grouping of the data would improve the overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You use basic descriptors like 'increased' and 'declined' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'reached highest at last' and 'reached up rapidly'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and adverbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. Additionally, ensure that you are using appropriate terminology for data interpretation, such as 'a marginal increase' or 'a significant surge'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'film club followed downward trend' is missing an article, and 'reached up rapidly' is an incorrect verb-preposition combination. There are also issues with tense consistency and sentence fragments, such as the incomplete final sentence. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including the correct use of articles and prepositions, and ensure that every sentence is complete and grammatically sound before moving on to more complex structures.

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