Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The rendered line graph illustrates the compares the level of interest presented by the participants in various activities at a particular social Centre in Melbourne, Australia in the time period between 2000 to 2020.
Overall information reveals that, film club experienced the highest attention by students throughout the given time slot. While, the amateur dramatics was attended by a minority of population as the time passes.
Looking the graph into more detail, it can be clearly seen that, initially the film club gets attended by 64 participants. Furthermore remained steady with a little dip in year 2010. Finally, in 2020 the number of members was 66. Talking about martial arts, it follows a zig-zag pattern, with the highest number participants of 40 in 2010.
Amateur dramatics and table tennis followed an opposite and tremendous patters. From both of them, the number of members in amateur dramatics showed up a slight growth until 2005. Then, significantly falls to a minimal number of 8 in 2020. Whereas, after 2010, number of participants considerably climbed up to the second highest number of 55 by the end of 2020.
Lastly, the music performances joined these fields in 2005, which gets the contribution of 10 members in the first 5 years and suddenly, the graph took a bent over the followed time period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the graph, including the trends for all five activities. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the film club's dominance and the contrasting paths of amateur dramatics and table tennis. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions the film club and amateur dramatics, it fails to capture the overall dynamic of the other categories. To improve, ensure the overview provides a more comprehensive summary of the most significant trends across all categories. The data is generally accurate, though the description of the music performances is slightly vague regarding the 'bent' in the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Furthermore', 'Whereas', and 'Lastly', to connect ideas. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Looking the graph into more detail' and 'Talking about martial arts'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the description of the music performance trend lacks sufficient clarity. Improving the variety and natural flow of your linking words will help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'minority of population', 'remained steady', and 'zig-zag pattern'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'the rendered line graph illustrates the compares', 'contribution of 10 members', and 'took a bent'. These errors occasionally hinder the precision of your report. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic collocations and ensuring that your vocabulary is used in the correct context to describe statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the film club gets attended' (passive voice error), 'Looking the graph into more detail' (preposition error), and 'the number of members in amateur dramatics showed up a slight growth' (awkward phrasing). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of passive voice.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.