Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There is a change in the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020 as mentioned in the above graph.
Table Tennis activity had attracted many participants in the years between 2010 to 2020, with a huge number of participants reaching around 50.
When coming to Film club, It maintained almost the same number of participants since year 2000 to 2020.
But, Coming to Amateur dramatics it saw a lot of downfall in the number of participants since the year 2005 to 2020. The newly or recently implemented activity which is Musical performances had created a rapid growth in the years 2010 to 2020.
The Martial arts was not in a stable number of participants. The number of participants of Martial arts were irregular in the years since 2000 to 2020.
Finally, The people were more interested in music and Table Tennis as mentioned in the graph above .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, such as the growth in Table Tennis and Musical performances, and the decline in Amateur dramatics. However, the report lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, and the description of the data is often imprecise (e.g., 'huge number' or 'a lot of downfall'). To improve, you should provide a clear summary of the overall trends in the introduction or as a separate paragraph and ensure that data points are referenced more accurately to support your observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes awkward. Phrases like 'When coming to' and 'But, Coming to' are not appropriate for academic writing and disrupt the flow of the text. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the transition between sentences could be smoother. To achieve a higher score, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'huge number', 'a lot of', and 'more interested in'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and nouns related to trends. For example, instead of 'downfall', words like 'decline' or 'decrease' would be more appropriate. Additionally, there are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'The Martial arts was not in a stable number', which sounds unnatural. Expanding your repertoire of trend-related vocabulary will significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect article usage ('The Martial arts'), subject-verb agreement ('The number of participants... were'), and awkward phrasing ('The newly or recently implemented activity which is Musical performances'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalisation of words like 'Table Tennis' and 'Film club' in the middle of sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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